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Greate!

Greate in every way. Nothing more to say.

Nice : )

Haven't seen something like that in a while. It must have took you ages. Quite impressive I must say.
Still I have some criticism for you; that is, if you want to hear it.

Usually I'm adressing Sound Issues or camera work, but not this time. It seemed to me, that you know pretty well, what you're doing.
In your case I want to talk about the script. On the whole it's solid work, but at some parts it's still lacking something. Mainly there are two parts, which could have been worked out a little better. The first one is her attempt to excape. In my opinion it was a little sudden, since in my oppinion there wasn't eough pressure built up to drive her that far. Although her reason to come back wasn't as clear as it should have been. I know she came back out of an inner conflict, but that wasn't worked out enough. I would have used the talking head to tempt her more often, trying to talk her in. Then you would have had the chance to make her articulate her conflict, without the need of a monologue. I also would have had her stop in front of the door instead of letting her fall, several feet away. That way it would have been more dramatic and authentic, since she threw away her chance to go. Maybe I would have layed the death of the Invetor and her escape together, so her choice would have been more dramatic. You know, like: the monster who kept her locked away for so long is about to die and her freedom is within her grasp but then she makes up her mind, because she feels sorry and want's to make up for her "bad behaviour".
There's a lot more to say about that, but I guess you get the Idea.

The next thing I want to address is the character of Vince. Since he's introduced pretty late, he doesn't get the chance to unfold as a character. In comparison to Lucy and the Inventor, he's pretty much "dead" or hollow. He could have been easily replaced by the driver of the refuse lorry, who could have given Lucy a ride to the toy shop, where she would have canged the sadness into happyness. Also Vinc's lines were lacking authenticity. They never made me see him as an important character.
In the end, the part after she's freed from her imprisonment seems as it was hurried along and wasn't thought out too well, just like you lost focus while writing it.

On the whole it's a great pice of work and I hope you don't get me wrong. I liked it very much. I can see how much work you've put in it, so don't take it to heart. I'm just trying to give you some pointers on how to improve your work even more.

So, keep up the good work!

Greets

Zephro

P.S.: I almost forgot; the voice actors did a great job, too. Good work, guys and gals. ^.^b

P.P.S.: Apologys for all misspellings and bad grammer. I wrot this in a hurry, therefor wasn't too diligent. ^ ^'

Nice one!

To be honnest, this isn't the first Animation I've seen, which goes in that direction. Still, I really enjoyed it. It's an interesting script and well animated, too. There isn't much criticism I can give, since it is good as it is (except from the part, where the blue guy talks. You should have left that out, since the animation pretty much speaks for itself. In fact, ther is really no need for dialog here). To be honnest, I would have loved to see this as a hand drawn and colored Animation, rather than flash, since I think it would fit it way better, but that's just my opinion.

So, what to say. It's rather good stuff. If you have more of that, I'd love to see it on the portal. Keep up the good work!

Performance? Anyone?

It's a nice game and all, but am I the only one with performance problems? In some areas it's surgeing like hell. That makes it almost painfull to look at.
If there are more people, who have the same problem, you should probably work on the performance more.
On the whole it's solid game, but it consumes way to much time for me to bother with it.

Keep up the good work!

Not much to say bout that ...

Well, I've always loved the Mastermind, but this is just awesome. I've played it all the way through and it was fun. Usually I get bored with flash games pretty quick, but this one was just so captive, that I had to play it all the way through.

Keep it going! You're great!